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some people feel that entertainers (e. g film stars, pop musicians, sports stars) are paid too much money. do you agree or disagree? which other types of job should be highly paid?

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 people feel that entertainers (e. g
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stars
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, pop musicians, sports
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) are paid too much money.
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 you agree or disagree?
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 other types of
job
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jobs
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 should be highly paid?
some
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 people feel that entertainers (e. g
film
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, film
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stars
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, pop musicians, sports
stars
Use synonyms
) are paid too much money.
do
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Do
show examples
 you agree or disagree?
which
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Which
show examples
 other types of
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
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 should be highly paid?
some
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Some
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 people feel that entertainers (e. g
film
Punctuation problem
, film
show examples
stars
Use synonyms
, pop musicians, sports
stars
Use synonyms
) are paid too much money.
do
Capitalize the word
Do
show examples
 you agree or disagree?
which
Capitalize the word
Which
show examples
 other types of
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
show examples
 should be highly paid?

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There is no essay yet. You need to give your view: agree, disagree, or partly agree. Then answer the second question about jobs that should get high pay.
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Write main ideas and add facts or examples. For example, explain why doctors, teachers, or nurses should get more money.
coherence and cohesion
Use paragraphs: an opening, two main parts, and an end. Each main part should have one clear idea.
coherence and cohesion
Do not repeat the question three times. Use linking words such as 'First', 'Also', 'For example', and 'In the end'.
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You copied the full question, so the topic is clear.
coherence and cohesion
The same text is easy to read because it is short and clear.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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