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You recently attended a training course organised by a local community centre. You were very satisfied with the course and the support provided by the staff. Write a letter to the manager of the community centre. In your letter: •Introduce yourself •Explain what you liked about the course and the service provided •Give some suggestions for improvement

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to express my sincere appreciation for the training course recently organised by your community centre. My name is Daljeet Singh, and I was one of the participants who attended the programme
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 week. I was highly impressed with both the content and the support provided by your staff. The sessions were well organised and presented in an
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engaging manner, making the topic easier to understand. The trainers were knowledgeable, approachable and always willing to answer the questions.
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, the study material distributed during the course was extremely useful for revising the concepts afterwards. I would like to commend the administrative staff for their professionalism and prompt assistance throughout the programme. I would,
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, like to offer a few suggestions for improvement. Extending the duration of the practical sessions would allow participants to gain more hands-on experience.
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, conducting some sessions over the weekends could benefit those who are unable to attend on weekdays
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 their work commitments Thank you for organising
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 a valuable course. I look forward to attending similar courses in the future. Yours faithfully, Daljeet

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Score: 8. Add the name or type of the course. This would make your letter more full and real.
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Say a little more about why the course was useful for you. For example, tell how you will use the new skills.
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Score: 8. Your paragraphs are good. For an even better flow, link the first good point to the staff help more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main point in each long sentence. This can make your ideas even easier to read.
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You answer all three parts: who you are, what you liked, and ways to make the course better.
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Your ideas are clear and fit the letter well. The tone is polite and right for a manager.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear order: thanks, good points, then ideas to improve.
coherence and cohesion
Words like “In addition”, “however”, and “Furthermore” help the reader follow your ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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