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The bar chart below illustrates the amount of time spent on various leisure activities by men and women in a given town in 2019.

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The chart shows us the
numbers
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number
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 of
period
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periods
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 on difference free- time activities by
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in
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the
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city in 2019. Overview, the male was demanded in full time, unworked, and
end of life
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end-of-life
 trend
all entire
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throughout
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 the
period
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entire period
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, the
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. The
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 exception to
this
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 was work full time have the
less
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lowest
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 percentage. female was lowest percentage
comparing
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compared
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 to
the male
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males
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. Men cover only 3 parts
but
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, but
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 still they have the highest level
all over
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throughout
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 the period.
they are reach
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 the peak at
retired
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retirement
, and unworked with 80 percentage which is considered the
bigest
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biggest
 level
achived
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achieved
 in both
side
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apply
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male and female. Women covered 5
part
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parts
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 of
activites
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activities
,
ladyes
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ladies
 had the peak in
unemployemet
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unemployment
 and retired. and the lowest as housewives.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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