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A magazine is inviting its readers to contribute to one of its articles titled ‘The Book I Was Most Influenced By’. Write a letter to the magazine editor about the book that you were influenced by the most. In your letter • describe the topic of the book • explain in what way it influenced you • say whether you think it might influence other people You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my interest in contributing to one of your magazine's
article
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 titled ‘The
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 I Was Most Influenced By’. My favourite
book
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 is From the Earth to the Moon
which
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 is written by Jules Verne. First of all, the
book
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 is about
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 journey of a group of people from
the
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Earth to the Moon.
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 the
book
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 was
publish
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 before the moon exploration project, the journey led many
scientist
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scientists
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 to
be an
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 astronauts after they read the
book
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. Since the writer
describe
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describes
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 a world where they use
magnificient
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magnificent
 space crafts and advanced technology, they have a great influence on how things are invented through imagination without any knowledge about space and its crafts. It helps me to broaden my knowledge about space and scientific research, and I pursued my
master
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 degree
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 the
book
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. I believe that the
book
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 should be read by all college students to raise their awareness about science and help them choose their majors. I kindly request that my reading experience be considered as a good example. I would really appreciate it if you give
a chance to me
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me a chance to contribute
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 to contribute the article you are going to publish. I can share more information if requested. Thank you for your consideration and time. I am looking forward to your response. Kind regards, Ibrahim

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task response
You answer all three parts. But some ideas are not clear or not true. Say more about how the book changed your own life. Use a more direct close: ask the editor to use your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, main part, and end. But the main part is one long block. Split it into two parts: one for the book topic, and one for its effect on you and other people. Use simple links such as “Also”, “Because of this”, and “For this reason”.
language
Check key forms: “article”, not “article’s”; “was published”, not “was publish”; “scientists”, not “scientist”; “a master’s degree”, not “master degree”; and “give me a chance”, not “give a chance to me”.
task response
You name the book and writer, tell what it is about, explain its effect on you, and say how it may help college students.
coherence and cohesion
The letter uses a good formal opening and ending. Words like “First of all”, “Since”, and “I believe” help the reader follow your ideas.
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