The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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bar graph illustrates the percentage of

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and

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who participated in physical

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in Australia across

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groups

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in 2010

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more physically active than

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in 2010. In the chart,

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's physical

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was shown to have increased across all

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's physical

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was in a downtrend in all

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it rose slightly. In terms of

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, in the 2010

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group between 15

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24 , 48% were involved in physical

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it increased to nearly 50% in

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that figure rose over 50% for adult

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declined in the

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,accounted 46%. Regarding

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between 15 and 24

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engaged

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,which is 52%.Later ,the physical

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of

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men decreased

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of 25 to 34

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reduced physical

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in all

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of 65 and above.

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showed around 50%