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Many universities graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession what factors may have caused this situation and what in your opinion should be care about it?

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task response
Score: 4. The text does not answer the question. It gives no reasons why graduates cannot get work in their chosen field, and it gives no ideas about what should be done. Write about the topic only. Give two causes and two ways to help.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 4. There are no clear parts: an opening, two main parts, and an ending. Do not repeat one sentence many times. Use one paragraph for causes and one for help. Use simple link words such as 'First', 'Also', 'For example', and 'In the end'.
task response
You wrote a full text, so there is content to check.
coherence and cohesion
The same short sentence is clear on its own.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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