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The plans show a school library 5 years ago and the same library now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The plans depict the alternation of the same
library
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 5 years ago and
nowadays
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the current
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 arrangement.
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, the
library
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 has made a significant change
and
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, and
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 it is becoming more modern. The plans had become more and more suitable for students and workers. First of all, 5 years
ago
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ago,
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 the
library
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 had
less
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fewer
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 functional
rooms
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 than nowadays. At the left corner at the bottom of the
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room
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room,
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 there were 2
rooms
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including
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, including
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classroom
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a classroom
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,
meeting
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a meeting
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room
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 and
borrowing
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a borrowing
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 and returning deck. Between two
book shelves
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bookshelves
 there were 4 study tables. At the right top of the
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room
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room,
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 there was a deck for those who needed computers. And
last
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 but not least,
at
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in
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 the right corner
there
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, there
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 was a
library
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 office. Nowadays
arrangement
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apply
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, there are some considerable changes in the plan. At the right corner of the
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room
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room,
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 they divided 3
rooms
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 into 4
rooms
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 for more functional subjects, there is a recording studio, meeting
room
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, returning and borrowed
room
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. They make
the
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apply
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borrowing and returning into two different areas. In the current plan, they
prioritize
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prioritise
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 the feeling of the student
,
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;
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 they replaced 4 study tables with 6 private study tables. More than that, the
library
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 office has been converted into a conference
room
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. And the
book shelves
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bookshelves
 at the bottom of the
library
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 were replaced with
the
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a
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 desk for
student’s
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students’
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 laptops. They
also
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 redesigned the desk for the computer into
the
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a
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 desk for the student's laptop.

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task response
Give a clearer overview. Say the main changes: more study space, new rooms, and changes to work areas. Do not say the library is better for workers unless the plan shows this.
task response
Check each part of the plan before writing. Some room names and places are not clear or may be wrong. Use simple, exact words such as “was changed into”, “was added”, and “was moved”.
coherence cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, overview, old plan, and new plan. This will make the report easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Group changes by area, for example left side, centre, and right side. Link ideas with simple words: “In the past”, “Now”, “Also”, and “However”.
coherence cohesion
Avoid very long sentences with many ideas. Write one main change in each sentence. This will help the reader understand the map.
task response
You describe both the past plan and the plan now.
task response
You notice key changes, such as private study tables, a recording studio, and a new conference room.
coherence cohesion
You use an overview and try to divide the report into past and present sections.
coherence cohesion
You use some comparison words, such as “replaced” and “converted”.
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