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The chart below gives information about the production of grains, measured in million metric tons, from the years 2010 to 2015, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The
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table chart illustrates the
production
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 of some grains like wheat,
barley
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,maize and
rice
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 from 2010 to 2030.
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, growth in the
production
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 of
barley
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 is very high amongst all from 2010 to 2030
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and growth in the
production
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 of
rice
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 is very low amongst all till 2030
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, which
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help
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 us to
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 and work on
week
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 areas.
Production
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 of wheat was 100 million metric ton which is very high compared to other grains in 2010
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. Rice was
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also
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rice
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 being the lowest compared to others
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which is
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 24.7 million metric tons
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, and
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also
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the least produced grain amongst all till 2030. Wheat and
barley
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has the
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 uniform growth in terms of
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production
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production,
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in which
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with
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barley
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 being
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very high
at the rate
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in terms
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 of
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production
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.
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,
rice
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 had decrased their
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in
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from 2010 to 2015, maize
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 has the increasing
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 but
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had
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 constant
production
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 from 2015 to 2020
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 was 34.5 million metric tons.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, barley, rice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metric tons
  • trend
  • projected
  • notable
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • consistent
  • proportion
  • comparison
  • forecast
  • extrapolate
  • economic impact
  • environmental factors
  • yield
  • cultivation
  • sustainable
  • harvest
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sector
  • quantify
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