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the graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods in the UK. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph

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The line graph shows the rate of
the
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change of
consumption
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 of fast food items
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Hamburgers
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, Hamburgers
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,
Fish
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 &
Chips
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, and Pizza in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
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, the
consumption
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 of Pizza was much higher than the other fast food items in
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 comparison.
While
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 for
Hamburgers
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,and
Fish
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 &
Chips
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they
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 show an exponential increase over time. The
consumption
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 of Pizza in the UK started at 300 in the year 1070,
then
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 the
consumption
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 began to slowly decrease, reaching just over 200 in the year 1990. In comparison, the
consumption
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 of
Hamburgers
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 and
Fish
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 &
Chips
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 started slightly
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similarly
 around less than 100
but
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 both had an exponential increase reaching around
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300 for
Hamburgers
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 and 500 for
Fish
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 &
Chips
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 in the year 1990.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, hamburgers, fish, chips with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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