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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. the letter, - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday - describe some possible disadvantages - say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Marc, I've heard about your camping adventure from your wife. To answer your questions about sleeping in a tent for several days, I would like to give you some of my experience. To me, camping is
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 a good way to learn about reduce on the minimum. Every gadget you put in the backpack needs to be carried.
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, less
wheight
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weight
 means
a shortage of
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fewer
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 problems.
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, you can enjoy the landscape
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 hiking to the next
destiantion
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destination
 much more.
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, there
maight
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might
be some disadvantages.
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,
the
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apply
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those
light
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lightweight
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 camping
equipments
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equipment
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such
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 as sleeping
bag
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bags
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 are very
usefull
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useful
 in size and mass, but
defenitely
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definitely
 not as comfortable as your belongings at home.
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mosquitos
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mosquitoes
 will be there in
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apply
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nature and biting you. For
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 it's
devinitely recommendet
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definitely recommended
 to take insect-repelent with you! Having those things in mind and
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 aware of the challenge you're going to face, it will be much
more easy
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easier
 to cope. If you apply
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, your trip will be a pleasure. I'm really looking
foreward
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forward
 to your stories about your vacations. In case you like
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it,
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 we could do our next adventure together. It would be a benefit to share a new hobby with you! See you soon, Klaus

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task response
Score: 6. Your ideas are clear, but some parts need to be more direct. Say more clearly that you would like to go camping with Marc this summer, not only on a future trip.
task response
Give one or two more reasons why Marc may enjoy camping, such as fresh air, quiet places, or time away from work.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. Keep one main idea in each part. The first body part mixes carrying less and enjoying the view; make these two short parts.
coherence and cohesion
Some linking words are not clear, such as “For this” and “If you apply this”. Use simple links: “So”, “Because of this”, and “If you do this”.
coherence and cohesion
The close is friendly, but it does not fully answer the last point. Try: “I would love to go camping with you this summer.”
task response
You answer all three parts: why camping is good, what can be hard, and if you want to go with your friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, body, and end. Words like “However”, “For example”, and “Also” help the reader follow your ideas.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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