You have a problem with a neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter -describe the problem -say how long it has been a problem -explain what action you want the neighbour to take

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Dear
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Gardener, I am writing to inform you about a situation regarding the loud music being played
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late
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. First of all, the
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noise of the music is affecting my sleep
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my kids are having trouble sleeping too.
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, lack of sleep is causing me problems at my workplace
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it is
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affecting my
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study and physical
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. It's been 2 weeks, we have been facing
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we were trying to avoid considering
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that you
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might have some sort of gathering or function at your place.
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, we have to flag
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up to you because we cannot afford to
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our sleep
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. I would kindly request
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find a solution where we can find some peace at night. My suggestions would be,
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, if you can please turn off the music by 10:00 PM.
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, you can keep it low or find sound proof system which will block the sound and help others to sleep. I hope you
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understand our situation and take some appropriate actions. Best Regards, Kiranbir Kaur

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You answer all parts of the task. Add one clear detail about when the music starts or how often it happens. This will make the problem more clear.
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Use more direct requests, such as “Please stop the music by 10 p.m.” This will make your letter stronger and easier to act on.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a good order: problem, time, and request. Use simple linking words like “Also”, “Because of this”, and “Therefore” to make the flow even smoother.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. The first paragraph could focus only on the noise, and the next one could focus on how it affects your family.
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You clearly explain the late-night music, how long it has happened, and what you want your neighbour to do.
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Your requests are polite and helpful, and you give more than one possible way to solve the problem.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, main body, and ending. It is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing fit a letter to a neighbour, and the tone is polite.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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