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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The line chart illustrates percentages of people living in
cities
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 in
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia,
Thailand
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 and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020, with the forecasts for 2030 and 2040. It is noticeable that the urban population in these four countries increased over the period shown.
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, Malaysia had the biggest population living in
cities
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in
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most of
time
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 and was predicted to see the largest growth from 1970 to 2040. Urban dwellers in Malaysia accounted for 30% in 1970 and continued to rise to nearly 85% in 2040, making it the most
urbanized
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urbanised
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 country in the given time. Indonesia
also
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 saw a constant growth in the population living in
cities
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 and overtook Philippine to rank second in 2010, recording about 14% urban rate in 1970 and 60% in 2040
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.
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, the urban rates in
Thailand
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 and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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flunctuated
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fluctuated
 during that time, which
rised
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rose
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 to see the first peak in 1990, with about 29% in
Thailand
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 and nearly 48% in
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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. In 2040, the
populaiton
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population
 living in
cities
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 in
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 is predicted to rank third at about 53%,
while
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 that in
Thailand
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 is
forecated
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forecast
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 to increase rapidly from 30% in 2020 to 47% in 2040.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, philippines, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban population
  • percentage of residents
  • live in cities
  • urbanisation rate
  • a steady increase
  • a sharp rise
  • a gradual growth
  • a significant change
  • the highest proportion
  • the lowest figure
  • overtake another country
  • remain relatively stable
  • follow a similar trend
  • experience rapid growth
  • be projected to rise
  • a predicted figure
  • by contrast
  • respectively
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