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The chart below shows the percentages of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015, and 2017. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph illustrates the various forms of media accessed by the nation in the following years 2013,2015 and 2017.
Overall
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, the most accessed media is television for all the years,
whereas
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 the least accessed were newspapers and radio.
To begin
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 with,
In
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in
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2013
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2013,
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 television was the most used socialmedia accounted 80%,
then
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figure
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the figure
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 was drop little and rose again to 70% in the following year.
Similarly
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 ,the
interent
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internet
 was intially 32% ,later the figure rose up 40 % in consective year.
Finally
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 ,it became one of the most accessed media
at the end
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 year .
In contrast
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,the newspaper was
initially
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 accessed 40,the figure fell to 21 %
at the end
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 .same were notice in the radio as well.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • access news via
  • news source
  • media platform
  • the proportion of people
  • the percentage of users
  • the most widely used medium
  • the least popular source
  • remain the leading source
  • show an upward trend
  • experience a decline
  • increase gradually
  • fall slightly
  • rise sharply
  • drop considerably
  • remain relatively stable
  • overtake another medium
  • a noticeable change
  • by contrast
  • respectively
  • over the period
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