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The line graph shows information about the salary of three sports received on a yearly basis over a period of 31 years from 1970 to 2000.

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The diagram displays data about the income of
players
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 in football,baseball,and
baskeyball
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baseball
 for three
decates
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decades
 from 1970 to 2000.
Overall
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,there was
dramatica
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a dramatic
 increase in
basktball
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basketball
. The football
salaries
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 were fluctuating over the years
and
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, and
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 the
salaries
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 of
players
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 for baseball were increasing slightly over the years. The
players
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'
salaries
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 in
basktball
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basketball
 were the highest
slalaries
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salaries
 among the other sports,
although
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 they started with
lowest
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the lowest
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salaries
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 with
0 dollars in1970
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$0 in 1970
 and started to
rasie
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rise
 steadily
untill
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until
 1985 at almost over 500,000 $.
Afrer
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After
 that started
increase
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 charply reaching the highest salary rate at ander 2,500,00$.The baseball started with the highest salary level among the other sports at above 0$ in1970 and
then
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 continued to rise steadily over the
the yeras
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years
 and
stoped
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stopped
 at almost 1,500,00 in 2000,which was the second highest for
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players
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players'
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 income. The football income was
increaing
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increasing
 steadily in the first five years,
then
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 started to increase sharply until 1995 at above 850,000$ .
Afer
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After
 that started to
drope
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drop
 slightly until the end
reching
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reaching
 under 850,000%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words players, salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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