The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by People in four different countries.

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This
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table shows four different countries and their
consuption
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consumption
of rice, wheat and maize per person per day.
This
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table illustrates clearly that each country has a
meain
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main
food source which the population favours. In cambodia its clearly rice which is eaten by the majority. In
Poland
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Poland,
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on the other
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hand
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hand,
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the people almost
exclusivly
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exclusively
eat wheat. In Mexico,
on the other hand
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, almost everybody
is eating
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eats
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maize. Egypt is the only country that
that
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apply
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consumes all of the three basic
foods
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foods,
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while
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wheat is still the main consumption good. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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this
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chart clearly illustrates
in
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that in
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different
reagons
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regions
of the world, with differnt climate
people
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, people
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grow different foods.
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might
also
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have other cultural reasons or be a financial matter
to
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of
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what is cheapest
and
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, and
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people
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what people
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can afford. The table
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, therefore
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therefore
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therefore,
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shows that in every single country out of the
four
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four,
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there is one basic food
that is
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favoured over the others.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rice
  • wheat
  • maize
  • country
  • countries
  • four
  • eat
  • eating
  • eaten
  • most
  • least
  • more
  • less
  • big
  • small
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • decrease
  • fall
  • change
  • pattern
  • trend
  • compare
  • difference
  • food
  • diet
  • table
  • data
  • numbers
  • overall
  • across
  • in
  • each
  • country
  • main
  • reason
  • climate
  • income
  • price
  • culture
  • effect
  • cause
  • therefore
  • there are
  • there is
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