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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.

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The bar chart shows data about how the population in one country consume their weekly income in eight distinct categories in 1968 and 2018.It compares the average weekly spending by percentage.
Overall
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, food reached
the
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its
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 peak significantly ,
while
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 fuel and power recorded the lowest
figure
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 during the period.
According to
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 the chart, families
spend
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spent
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 the highest rate of their income on food at approximately 35% and 17% in 1968 and
2018
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2018,
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 respectively,
whereas
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 they spent around 10% in housing ,which is about half as much as in 2018.A
quiet
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 large amount of money was spent in lesuire at around 22% in 2018, more than twice as much as in 1968.
looking
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 at the chart,fuel and power were marked as the least money consumers ,
average
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with an average
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 of 5% weekly.
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, personal goods, clothing and footwear were accounted for
similar
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at similar
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 rates at nearly 10% maximum.
On the other hand
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, transport rates fluctuate over the years
as
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, as
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it
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they
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 doubled in 2018.
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,
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apply
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 household goods spending remained the same in both years.

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