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The plans The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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Introduction
The plans compare the current layout of Southwest
airport
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 with its proposed arrangement after redevelopment next year.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, the airport will be considerably enlarged and equipped with more passenger facilities. Most significantly, the number of
gates
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 is planned to increase from eight to eighteen,
while
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 the existing straight
corridor
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 will be replaced by a Y-shaped
area
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.
However
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, the security, passport control and customs
area
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 will remain unchanged.
Body paragraph 2
At present, the main terminal is divided by departures on
left
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the left
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 and arrivals on
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right
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the right
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that
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,
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 both
have
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 only one entrance. There is a check-in desk on the left and a cafe on the
right
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 in the departure terminal, followed by passport control and security, which
then
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 ends with the walkway between the eight
gates
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 in the straight
corridor
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.
Conclusion
Next year, after the development, the departure and arrival
terminal
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terminals
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 will remain at the same site, but there will be a baggage drop-off
area
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 on the left and a check-in desk on the
right
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 with a cafe
in
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at
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 the bottom of the departure terminal. There will
be
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also be
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also
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 a cafe, an ATM and a car hire office on the
right
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 of the arrival
area
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. There are going to be some shops in the
corridor
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 between the security and the
gates
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area
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which
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, which
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 will be
expand
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expanded
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 from
straight
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a straight
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 to
bigger
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a bigger
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 Y-shaped
corridor
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 that will contain eighteen
gates
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 served by
sky
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the sky
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 train for transportation.

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task response
Give a clearer main view in the first part. State the two biggest changes: the new Y-shaped gate area and the much wider range of services for people.
task response
Check every detail on the plans before you write. Be careful with the place of the check-in area, baggage drop, shops, and the sky train. A plan task needs exact place words such as left, right, beside, and between.
task response
Compare now and the future more often. For example, say that the old gate path has eight gates, while the new one has eighteen and is linked by a sky train.
coherence and cohesion
Use a more even order: start with the main view, then describe the main building, then the gate area. This will make the change easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Make long last sentences into two or three short sentences. This will help the reader follow each new feature.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words for place and time, such as 'at present', 'after redevelopment', 'on the left', 'on the right', and 'between these areas'.
coherence and cohesion
Keep the same verb time in each part. Use present forms for the current plan and future forms for the new plan.
task response
You give a clear overall view that the airport will become bigger and have more services.
task response
You include key changes, such as the rise in gates from eight to eighteen, the Y-shaped area, shops, and the sky train.
coherence and cohesion
Your answer has a useful opening, an overall view, and separate parts for the current and future plans.
coherence and cohesion
You use place words, such as 'on the left', 'on the right', and 'between', to show where areas are.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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