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The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line graph
describe
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describes
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 the
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amount
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number
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 of
jobs
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 in four different
category
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categories
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 in
US
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the US
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 from 1960 to 2020.
Amount
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 of
jobs
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 are measure in millions.
Overall
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, manufacture having the highest
amount
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 of
jobs
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in
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at
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 the
starting
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start
. Meanwhile,
Healthcare
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the healthcare
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sector
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 saw a sharp growth amongst other
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sector
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sectors
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. In 1960, Manufacture
sector
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 was the highest
job giving
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job-giving
sector
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 of about 15
million
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 and peaked at 20
million
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 in 1980
, after
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. After that
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then
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, there
is
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was
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 only
decrease
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a decrease
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 in the
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amount
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number
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 of
jobs
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. Meanwhile,
agriculture
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the agriculture
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sector
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 started at around 5
million
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jobs
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, but has sudden decrease till 1980. After
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then
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that
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,
this
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sector
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has
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will have
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 the least
amount
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 of
jobs
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 by 2020, which is around 3
million
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.
In contrast
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, retail was at the starting point of 5
million
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jobs
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at
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in
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 1960, but
was having the
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had a
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 sharp increase till 2000,
speed became stady increase
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and then the increase became steady
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 after 2000. Healthcare was at
lowest
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its lowest
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on
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at
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 the
starting
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start
, which was about 2
million
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. But saw
a
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the
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 highest growth
amongs
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among
 all.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, jobs, sector, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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