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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reportung the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar graph illustrates the percentage of people's drinking habit's at five
various
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apply
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cities
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 in
australia
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Australia
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 over the period of 28 days.
Overall
Linking Words
,
cafe
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cafes
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 in all five
cities
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 are attracting most of the individuals, except Adelaide. Fresh
coffee
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selling
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sales
 are less in
austrila
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Australia
 when compared
others
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to others
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and
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, and
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 instant
coffee
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 is always
been
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more popular than fresh one. Focusing on
cafe's
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cafes
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, all urban areas
has
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have
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 more than 49% of residents
are choosing
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who choose
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 to visit
cafe
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cafes
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 for
coffe
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coffee
 or tea. Sydney, Melbourne
and
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,
Hobart
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and Hobart
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had rocket
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have rocketed
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 over 60% in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks, and
other
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the other
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 2
cities
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are
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have
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 stayed between
49 to 65 percent
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49% and 65%
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. Shifting focus to instant
,
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 and fresh
coffee
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, Sydney and Melbourne
has
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have
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 close percentage 44%, 45% and, 43%, 47 respectively.
Other
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The other
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 three
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cities
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cities'
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 fresh
coffee
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 had similiar amount
people
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of people
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 cosuming 35%, 35% and
,
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 38%.
and
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Brisbane, Adelaide
and
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, Hobert had more than 50% of
consumer
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consumers
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 choosing instant
coffe
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coffee
.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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