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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. write 150 words

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The given pictorial map illustrates the remarkable expansion
,
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 which has been undergone in a science
park
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 between 2008 and the present. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the research and development sector has been modernised in a substantial way,
while
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 novel
transporation
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transportation
 access
have
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has
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 been constructed across the
park
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. Apart from that, environmental values have been protected in order to safeguard the green space in the area.
To begin
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, a grassland was maintained in the west-north and the east,
while
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 woodland was preserved in the north, south-east and west in the
park
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. More interestingly, a car
park
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constructed
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was constructed
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 in the middle of the area, which was connected to the IT centre,
cyber
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the cyber
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 security unit and
business
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the business
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 units by footpaths.
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, a road ran
accors
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across
 the science
park
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,
by
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connecting an administrative building with other
fcailities
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facilities
,
while
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 a railway
constructed
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was constructed
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 in the south. Moving on to the present context, novel pedestrian ways have been implemented over the years
,
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 to ensure
the
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easy access to the surroundings. More positively, transportation facilities have been expanded,
while
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 constructing a new railway station, a cycle path and a bus stop. More interestingly, the space of the car
park
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 has been
minimized
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minimised
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,
while
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 the
cyber security
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cybersecurity
 unit has been widened. More importantly.
the
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 grassland
was
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in the west-north has been replaced by
new
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a new
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 research and development sector,
while
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 the reception at the administrative office
dissapeared
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disappeared
,
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while
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and
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 a university hub has been
replaced
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established
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • science park
  • industrial site
  • research facility
  • laboratory building
  • office complex
  • visitor centre
  • a newly constructed building
  • a former building
  • be demolished
  • be replaced by
  • be converted into
  • be expanded
  • be modernised
  • road network
  • pedestrian path
  • cycle lane
  • car park
  • public transport access
  • green space
  • on the northern side
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