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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train betweem 1970 and 2010

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The graphics
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the data about how many
commuters
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 travel
everyday
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every day
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 by three
transports
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transport modes
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 in the UK, over a forty-year period between 1970 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is evident that number of
commuters
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 by car experienced an upward trend,
while
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commuters
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 who travel by
bus
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 and by train declined. At the beginning of the period, all three figures remained unchanged between 1970 and 1980.
Then
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 travelers by car and train increased steadily,
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however
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the
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 number of people who
reach
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reached
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 their work
with
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by
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bus
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 markedly declined
around
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to around
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 3.5 million in 2000.
Following
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this
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,
traveling
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travelling
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 by
bus
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become
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became
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 less popular, which resulted in a decline
number
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in the number
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 of
commuters
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 to 3 million. At
this
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 point,
people
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the number of people
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 who travel by train
was grew up
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has grown
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 markedly, but the result was
same
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the same
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 as
travelers
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that of travellers
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 by
bus
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.
Finally
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,
commuters
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 by car plateaued in 2010, which marked
highest
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the highest
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 point of the period.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words commuters, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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