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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

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The graph illustrates the percentages of Australian export with four countries between 1990
to
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and
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 2012 .
This
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 report aims to
summaries
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summarise
 the key trends,significant
compraisons
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comparisons
 and notable changes highlighted in the data.
Overall
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,it is
evidant
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evident
 that the percentages of
China
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 experienced a marked increase.The largest proportion is observed in
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china
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China
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,
while
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 India represents the smallest.Another notable trend is that Japan and the US showed relatively similar patterns over the
period
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.
Initially
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,Japan accounted for approximately 17%,making
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it the
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 highest among all countries.
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However
,its proportion declined gradually over the
period
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.
In contrast
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,
China
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 experienced a significant increase,rising from around 3% in 1990 to become the highest proportion by 2012.
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,a noticeable trend is US around 5% ,showed decrease over the
period
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.
In addition
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,India showed a gradual rise before a slight decline
at the end
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 of the
period
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. In summary,
China
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 experienced substantial growth,
while
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 Japan witnessed a decline.India and the US showed minor fluctuations.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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