The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The presented line chart illustrates the proportion of difference in compensation between males and females from 1978-2008 across five
various
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countries.
Overall
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, Japan witnessed a sharp decline in
earning
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the earning
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gaps between the two genders, which fell from 48% in 1978
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to 41% in
2008
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2008,
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approximately.
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, it is still the
most
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country with
salary
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the largest salary
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variation in comparison to other nations.
Similarly
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, the United States
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faced a slightly
less
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lower
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percentage drop, reaching roughly 26%, negligibly above the United Kingdom. France's percentage of difference
also
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depreciated gradually, achieving the lowest income gap rate between men and women.
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the United Kingdom's index decreased by roughly 5 per cent.
On the other hand
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, Australia's rates
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declining
on
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at
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a similar rate
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France between 1978
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and
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1988.
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, the indicator rose drastically in 2008, after remaining constant between 1988
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and
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1998. Despite that, it is far lower in terms of wage gaps than Japan, the United Kingdom, and
United
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the United
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States.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender pay gap
  • income disparity
  • earnings difference
  • male and female employees
  • a noticeable decline
  • a gradual reduction
  • a sharp fall
  • a slight increase
  • a fluctuating trend
  • the highest figure
  • the lowest point
  • narrow considerably
  • remain higher than
  • stand at
  • fall from ... to ...
  • in contrast to
  • over the three-decade period
  • equal pay
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