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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population age 65 and above in three countries.

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The statistics portray the data and predictions about the
population
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 (aged 65) change of Canada,
Germany
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, and the
UK
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 in the given timeframe of 1988, 2000, and the upcoming year, 2030.
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, it is notable that
Germany
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 has dominated during the given years 1988 and 2000, and 2030 with 20.45%, 25.32%, and 30.42%, respectively, as it had the most people out of the three countries,
whereas
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 the
UK
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 had the least amount of
population
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 (age 65) throughout the years, consisting of 14.23%, 14.89%, and 20.35%, respectively. In detail, the data illustrates that in 1988,
Germany
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 had an initial
population
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 of 20.45% and increased by approximately 5% during 2000.
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 to
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, the data predicts that in 30 years,
Germany
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 will witness an increase of 5%, with 30.42%.
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 the leading country, Canada and the
UK
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also
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 kicked off with 16.32% and 14.23%, and progressively developed into 20.67% and 14.89%, respectively. In 2030, Canada will have a
population
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 improvement of 26.35%, and the
UK
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 will experience approximately 6% incline, consisting of 20.35%.
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, despite the fact that these three countries have seen a
population
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 increment, the ranking has remained the same, led by
Germany
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 and trailed by the
UK
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.

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