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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015.

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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015.
In 1975, Finsbury
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 came first with amounted to 16%, after the proportion of Bamforth
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 accounted by 9%. For the next period, Eldan
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 remained unchanged and
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 to 3%
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 Bamforth
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 rose slightly to 11%. The opposite was true for Finsbury
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 underwent a tiny decrease from 16% to 14%. In the third given year, the sharp improvement can be
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observed
 for Eldan
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which
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the
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amounted to 14% despite an
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insignificant
 increase in Bamforth
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 and Finsbury,
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 relatively to 13% and 15%.

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