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You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •explain the important event •apologies for the situation •suggest a new arrangement

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Dear John, How are you doing
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? I hope
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 letter finds you well
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 I wanna tell you
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that,
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unfortunately
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 I cannot visit you next Wednesday as we planned
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 an emergency happened here. My
father in law
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father-in-law
 will go for an operation next Thursday;
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, all family members should be with him
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 critical time. I sincerely apologize bro
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 not being able to visit you
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, I have been waiting for
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 date for months
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, my sons were so
excitied
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excited
 to see your family and enjoy the picnic there. I would like to suggest another date if you don't mind, we can visit you once my father in law recovered. Sadly, I cannot say when
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exactly,
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 as you know it is a surgery
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 he needs a
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 of time to be
completley
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completely
 recovered. I am looking forward to
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 from you
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. With all love, Jack

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task response
Explain the event in a more clear way. Say when the operation is and why you need to stay at home.
task response
Give a more exact new plan. For example, say you will write again after the operation and ask if a date next month is good.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Use simple links such as “because”, “so”, and “after that” to make the ideas flow more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point: the bad news, your sorry words, and the new plan. This will make the letter easier to read.
task response
You talk about the family event, say sorry, and give a new idea for the visit. You answer all parts of the task.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow. It has a friendly greeting, clear paragraphs, and a warm closing.
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