A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/ She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday Describe some possible disadvantages Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Hello Rahul, It has been ages since we
last
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communicated. Hope
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letter finds you well and you are in good health and in high spirits.As I
recieved
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received
your text that you are planning to experience
camping
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a camping
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holiday for the first time
in
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this
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upcoming
summer
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year. As we all
know
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you
work
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in
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sector
from
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few
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years,
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so you are mentally and physically exhausted all the times so
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short trip
help
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will help
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you in mentally well being
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, and
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you
feel
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will feel
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more relaxed and calm after the holiday .
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, as camping required physically fit
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so,
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I would
advice
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advise
you that please start
workout before
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working out at least
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two weeks
of
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before
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going
camping
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camping,
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as
i
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I have
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seen your pictures at instagram that you
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have gained
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a lot of weight from eating junk food . Moving
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, as I went to India to see my mom
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and dad
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for one month
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otherwise
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, otherwise
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if
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been
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were
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in
Canada
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Canada,
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also
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wish to join
for
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apply
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camping
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summer
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, as
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as
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so that
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this
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way we
both
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can met and enjoy our gossip. Hopefully, you will
definately
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definitely
enjoy your first
summer
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camping
and
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, and
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please
donot
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do not
forget to wear layers of clothes
some
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, some
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time weather change is unpredicatble specially in
summer
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. In the
end
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always keep me updated with your text
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excited to see your pictures on
instagram
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.
yours
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truly, Navdeeep

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task response
Add a clear part about the bad sides of camping, such as rain, bugs, cold nights, or hard sleeping. You give good reasons to go, but this part is missing.
task response
Say your answer to going with your friend more clearly. Explain that you cannot go because you will be in India, but that you would like to go at another time.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraph starts, such as “First,” “However,” and “Finally,” to help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. Put the good points in one paragraph, the bad points in one, and your plan to go or not go in the last one.
coherence and cohesion
Check long sentences and full stops. For example, put a space after a full stop and do not join too many ideas in one sentence.
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You explain well why camping may help your friend rest after hard work.
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You include useful advice about working out and wearing layers of clothes.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a warm greeting and a friendly closing, which fit a letter to a friend.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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