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Accomodation and transport problems are increasing in many large cities. Businesses are encouraged to move to rural areas . Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

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Accomodation
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Accommodation
 and transport issues are growing in many cities. Businesses are advised to relocate to rural areas.
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 with, from my perspective, I believe that businesses are one of the leading causes of
accomodation
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accommodation
 and transportation issues for many reasons. Overcrowding in cities is a vital problem that the world currently faces. Corporate buildings are taking over the city and are leaving less
lands
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land
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 for establishments that serve the community. There is
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 the fact that
businesses
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business
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 employees make up a majority

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Answer the main question clearly: say if the good points are greater than the bad points. Your view is not clear yet.
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Finish both sides of the answer. Explain the good points of moving businesses to rural areas, such as less traffic and more room in cities. Then explain the bad points, such as fewer workers, weak roads, or high moving costs.
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Develop each main point. After each idea, explain why it matters and give one real or clear example.
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Check the meaning of your first point. Offices taking land may affect space in cities, but link this more directly to homes and transport.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, good points, bad points, and conclusion. The ending should repeat your final view.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add explanation and an example.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links to show the flow of ideas: First, Also, However, For example, As a result, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Complete the last sentence and avoid leaving ideas unfinished. This makes the text easier to follow.
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You identify two key city problems: housing and transport. This is a good start and stays on the topic.
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You try to explain why businesses can add to crowding in cities.
coherence and cohesion
Your opening shows your view early, so the reader can see the direction of your answer.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words such as “To begin with” and “There is also the fact that” to add ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • housing shortage
  • rising property prices
  • traffic congestion
  • overcrowded public transport
  • relieve pressure on cities
  • affordable housing
  • a better work-life balance
  • create local employment
  • support the rural economy
  • lower operating costs
  • reliable infrastructure
  • high-speed internet access
  • poor transport links
  • a skilled workforce
  • recruit qualified staff
  • delivery costs
  • distance from customers
  • government incentives
  • invest in regional development
  • relocate their operations
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