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The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts data about Dubai gold sales in 2002,
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 measured in millions.
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 the most remarkable increase was in Mar,Which cleary surpassed all the other points by a substantial margin,the reverse was true for
Feb
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February,
 which took the lowest position during the given period . In terms of the leading
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 the sales of Dubai gold started just over 200
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 in Feb, before witnessing a massive increase to 350
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 in Mar.
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was in Jul and Aug and
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 they had a fluctuation trend,commencing with just over 100
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,
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 slightly grew to 200
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 before falling and recovering to
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 point in Jul.
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 the other month
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 Jen begin at 200
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, then
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 gently grew to almost 250
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 in Feb,
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 Apr initiated
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million
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 plummeted to around 70
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 in Jul .Interestingly,in Oct
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 Nov
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 Dec remained steady just below.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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