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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the informa%on by selec%ng and repor%ng the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the informa%on by selec%ng and repor%ng the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line
grapgh
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graph
 depicts the moderation of prices of the
three
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 different metals over the year 2014 .
Overall
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 , there
has
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have
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 been major changes seen in
rates
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the rates
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 of
the
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apply
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nickel
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nickel,
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where as
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whereas
 the ratio of
price
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the price
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 of
the
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apply
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copper and zinc
was
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has
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 not
much changed
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changed much
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 from
january
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January
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 to
december
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December
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.
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However
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However,
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 in the december the percenatge of all
of
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apply
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the
metals
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metal
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 prices were almost
near by
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the same
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. To commence , in January the price of the nickel was at the highest percentage
where as
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apply
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,
the
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whereas the
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 other two metal didnt had much difference . Surprisingly , there was a major downfall in the ratio of nickel rates within two months
which
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, which
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 is from six
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percent
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per cent
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 to 1
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percent
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per cent
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 in March
and
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, and
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then
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it
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apply
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again in May it decrease till minus
fours
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four per cent
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percent
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which
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, which
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 is the lowest among the
three
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 metals over the time period . Moving forward , there is a decreasing trend seen in the price of
the
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apply
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copper till june , and
then
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 there is
slight
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a slight
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 rise in the percentage in
prices
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the prices
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 in
month
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the month
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 of
june
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June,
 after that
in
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it
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 remained constant for two months .
Whereas
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 ,
zinc
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the zinc
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 ratio was increased in january unfornatuely after that it started to decrease from
three
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 to minus 1
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percent
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per cent
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 in the month of
june
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June,
 it showed slight variation
and
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, and
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the
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apply
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in
october
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October,
 it shot up to 2.5
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percent
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per cent
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 and was
highest
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the highest
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 among
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three
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the three
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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