You want to sell your laptop. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. Explain why you are selling the laptop. Describe the laptop. Suggest a date when your friend can come and see it.

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Dear Mohi, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to know about can you like to buy my

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laptop

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. I am selling

this

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laptop

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because I purchased a new

laptop

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just 8 few days ago. As you know, I bought

this

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laptop

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last

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year, yet it has

low

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a low

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configuration

which

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was not suitable for my work. So, I decided to buy a brand new

laptop

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, the condition of my

laptop

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is very good. It has 28 582 GB

storage

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of storage

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, and 8GB

RAM

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of RAM

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which

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is useful for you. I know very well

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that

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you do not have too much work on the

laptop

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Also

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, you told me

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last

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month that you want to buy a second-hand

laptop

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Apart from

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this

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, I

also

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gave you some accessories

such

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as wireless headphones & a pen drive. I have an off on the weekends.

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, if you could buy

this

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laptop

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then

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you can visit my home to see the condition of the

laptop

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. Could you

will

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come on

25th

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the 25th

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of September since I have

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some

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leisure time

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this

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weekend. Anyway, that's all for now. Lots of love, Sukhraj Kaur

prabhjotkaur3130

Sep 8, 2026

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task response

Say more clearly why the old laptop is not good for your work. Give the day and time for the visit in one clear sentence.

task response

Describe the laptop with correct facts. Check the storage number, and say if the charger and other items are part of the sale.

coherence and cohesion

Put the reason for selling, the laptop details, and the visit plan in clear separate parts. Use simple link words such as "Also", "Because", and "So".

coherence and cohesion

Make some sentences shorter and clearer. For example, write: "Can you come on 25 September? I am free that day."

coherence and cohesion

Use "I will give you" for items you plan to give. Do not use "I gave you" if you have not given them yet.

task response

You talk about why you are selling the laptop, what it has, and when your friend can come.

coherence and cohesion

The letter has a friendly start and end, and the main ideas are in separate parts.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

193 words

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