You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter explain -why you changed jobs -describe your new job -Tell him/her your other news.

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Dear Smith, I hope you are doing great. I am writing
this
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letter to share my life updates with you. You would be
delightful
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delighted
to know that I have joined
in
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a textile company recently. The reason,
due to
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which I have changed my job
,
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is
increased
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the increased
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workload at
previous
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my previous
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automobile company.
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, I had been quite underpaid at that company. Currently, I am working as a manager in
this
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business because I had done diploma in
the
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management. I usually
manages
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manage
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the retail and sales of goods
and
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, and
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at certain times,
deals
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deal
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with staff rotation
plan
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as well.
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all
this
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, another
good
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piece of good
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news is that my elder brother’s wedding
got
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fixed.
This
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special occasion will come in the month of
november
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November
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. Plan your things ahead because you
must
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need to attend his marriage. That’s all for now. Hope to see you soon. Lots of love, Prabh.

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Give a little more about the new job, such as what you do each day and how you feel about it.
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Make the reason for leaving clearer: say that the work was too much and the pay was too low.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Use simple links like “Also”, “Now”, and “Finally” to make the ideas flow.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each part. For example, put all job details in one part and all wedding news in another.
coherence and cohesion
Check small grammar points that can make the meaning clearer, such as “I usually manage” and “in November”.
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You answer all three parts: why you changed jobs, what your new job is, and your other news.
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The friendly tone is right for a letter to a friend, and the wedding invite feels warm and personal.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow. Each part has a clear purpose.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are suitable and friendly.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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