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You are going to be absent from work for a few days. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: * explain why you will be absent from work * say how many days you will be away * explain how you will manage your work while you are absent

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Dear Manager, I am writing to request about three
days
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 off for next
week
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 regarding my
project
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. I will be
unavailabe
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unavailable
 next
week
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 for
few
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a few
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days
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. I am going to visit
a
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apply
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specific places in order to research
about
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apply
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my
project
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.
This
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project
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worth
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is worth
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 50% of my final grade.
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, it is very important for me to finish
this
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 before
due
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the due
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 date.
Also
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, I need three
days
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 off because it will take me much more time to travel
acorss
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across
 different places. I will be away three
days
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 from Monday to
Wednsday
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Wednesday
 next
week
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but
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, but
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 I will be availble rest of the
days
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including
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, including
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weekend
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the weekend
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for
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, for
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 work. I already
assing
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assigned
 some of the tasks to our team.
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, I completed half of our next
week
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's
project
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 in advance.
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, the team just has to review it and polished a bit.
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, I will be available on calls and online meetings for any kind of help,
while
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 staying away. Thank you so much. Yours
Faithfully
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faithfully
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, Swet

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task response
Give a clear reason for the time off. Say what the project is and why you need to visit these places. Change “request about” to “request three days off.”
task response
State the exact days in one clear sentence: “I will be away from Monday to Wednesday next week.”
task response
Your plan for work is clear, but make it more direct. Say which tasks you finished and who will do the other work.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each part: reason, days away, and work plan. This will make the letter easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words such as “Also”, “As a result”, and “While I am away”. Do not use too many links in one part.
coherence and cohesion
Use a more work-like start and end, such as “Dear Mr/Ms [Name]” and “Yours sincerely,” if you know your manager’s name.
task response
You answer all three parts of the task: why you need time off, how long you will be away, and how the work will be done.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has clear parts and the time away is easy to find.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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