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You have bougth some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email Give details of the purchase Describe the problem Explain why you need a replacement urgently

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my latest purchase from your website. I bought a blue shirt
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 I am not happy with it. I
purchsed
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purchased
 a blue shirt from your website
last
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 Monday
and
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 it got
dilevered
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delivered
last
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 night. The size was medium
and
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, and
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 it was
athletic
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an athletic
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 short sleeve with white buttons and cotton
metrial
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material
.
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 the colour and size
was
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were
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 perfect as
per
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apply
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advertised, the
metrial
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material
 was very rough and made me itchy all
the
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day.
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, it got
shrink
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shrunk
 when I washed it
for
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a
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 few times.
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, it does not fit me properly.
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, I noticed the colour was getting duller than my other shirts. I would really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you
can
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could
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 replace it with
new
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a new
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 one as soon as possible.
This
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 is very important and urgent because I arranged
an
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a
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 party in
next
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the next
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 two days. Thank you so much Yours
Faithfully
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faithfully
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, Swet

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task response
You answer all parts of the task. Add the order number, the price, and the date to make the request more clear. Say what size and colour you want for the new shirt.
task response
Explain the need for a new shirt in a more formal way: you have a party in two days and need the shirt for it.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, problem, and request. Use simple link words such as “First”, “Also”, and “For this reason” to join the ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. Put all facts about the order in one paragraph, all problems in the next, and your request at the end.
coherence and cohesion
Use the same word for the item, such as “shirt”, so the reader can follow your meaning easily.
task response
You clearly say what you bought, what was wrong, and why you need a new one soon.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow. The greeting and closing are suitable for a formal letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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