A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Anchal, I hope you are doing very well
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I'm writing
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letter as a
advice
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piece of advice
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that you asked for
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regarding your
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camping holiday. To be honest, I believe camping is
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the best
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activity that a person can do in his or her vacation.
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, if you are looking for new friends or like to know more about new things, camping will help you in increasing your peer group
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simlutaniously
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simultaneously
you will learn more from them.
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, camping
do
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also
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have some disadvantages. Like, you live away from your home and family
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can cause
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homesickness
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, you live outside in nature where you cook by yourself
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you have to protect yourself from mosquitoes or other insects. I would
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like to join you for
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summer camping, as I am fond
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of
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camping and like to explore nature. I'm looking forward to
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you. Take care, Rajat

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task response
Answer each part with a little more detail. Say why your friend may enjoy it, give clear problems, and explain your plan to go with him.
task response
Use a warm, personal letter style. Ask about his plans and end with a friendly line, such as “Write back soon.”
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Link ideas more smoothly with words such as “Also”, “For this reason”, and “On the other hand”.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. The camping benefits paragraph is clear; make the last paragraph a little longer to give your reason and plan.
task response
You cover all the main points: good things about camping, possible problems, and your wish to go with your friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow because each paragraph has a clear purpose.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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