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The line graph shows Paris Metro station passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph shows Paris Metro station passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph
illustrated
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illustrates
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 different time
zone people
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zones
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 in
Paris
Correct article usage
the Paris
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 Metro station.
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, at 6:00am, there are 100
of
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apply
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people. At 8am, and 6pm in the evening
people
Punctuation problem
, people
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 in the Paris station had
significiantly
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significantly
 increased
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 at 11:00 till 14:00 are remain steady. For 16:00 and 20:00 had significantly droped.
According to
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 different , passager in Paris metro station has dramatically

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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