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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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Introduction
The maps depict the layout of Beechwood
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farm
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Farm
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 in 1950 and how it has evolved with more facilities today.
Overall
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, the whole area has become extensively improved, with more features for camping and relaxation
,
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 The significant change is the establishment of roads and parking.
Body paragraph 1
In 1950, the
farm
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 was mainly used for agricultural and breeding of sheep and chickens. Most
ares
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acres
 were designated for cultivating fruits and vegetables. There was a river crossing from
upper
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the upper
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 left corner to
lower
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the lower
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 right corner in a U shape. A main road
was
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apply
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bordered the
farm
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 in
upper
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the upper
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 left corner, and there
was
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were
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 only tracks in the
farm
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.
Conclusion
Today, Beechwood
farm
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 which was
undeveloped
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undeveloped,
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 has become
modernized
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modernised
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 with the refurbishment of tracks to roads. Parking sites are
also
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 available on both ends of the road
and
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, and
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 the
farm
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 shop is opposite
of
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the
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 left parking area on the other side of the road. The area for farming has
reminded
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remained
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 the same, but the sites for sheep
was
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were
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 demolished
and
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, and
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 it
become
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became
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 a camping field with tents. Now, solar panels have been installed in the
farm
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.

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task response
Give a clearer overall view. State the two or three biggest changes, such as new roads, car parks, a shop, camping, and solar panels, as well as what stayed the same.
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Check every detail on the maps before writing. Make sure you say where each new thing is and what old use it took over. For example, explain the change from the sheep area to the camping area more clearly.
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Use more direct map details. Compare the fruit and vegetable areas, animal areas, paths or roads, the river, and new visitor areas. This will make the report more full.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: first paragraph for the maps, second for the main changes, third for the 1950 plan, and fourth for the plan today.
coherence and cohesion
Put ideas about the same place together. For example, describe all changes near the road and car parks in one part, then describe changes in the farm fields in another part.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words such as "In 1950", "Today", "By contrast", "Also", and "While". Do not join two full ideas with only a comma.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence clear and complete. Some parts are hard to follow, such as "A main road was bordered the farm" and "the area for farming has reminded the same". Write shorter sentences when needed.
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You give a useful overall point that the farm now has more places for visitors, especially roads, car parks, and camping.
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You include several important changes: roads in place of tracks, car parks, a farm shop, camping tents, and solar panels.
coherence and cohesion
Your report has a clear time order: it first describes the old farm and then the farm today.
coherence and cohesion
The opening paragraph helps the reader understand the main direction of change.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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