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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The maps depict how Porth
harbour
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Harbour
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 has been enhanced since 2000.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, it is notable that
Porth Harbor
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Port Harbour
 has undergone a significant improvement and has become a visitor-friendly
area
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 with accommodation, commercial spaces and more facilities.
Body paragraph 2
With respect to infrastructures, the fishing boats
area
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 and Marina for private yachts
has
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have
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 been switched. A new dock has been mounted near the old dock to accommodate more passenger ferries. The public beach on the northeast remains the same. There has been a construction of a new
area
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 for showers and toilets between the two car parks. As for commercial purposes, there are new cafes and shops between
Marina
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the Marina
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 and life boat
area
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.
Body paragraph 3
For transportation, the main
road
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 remains unchanged along the west of the harbour, running from north to south. The smaller
road
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 to the car park in the northwest
area
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 was demolished,
whereas
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 a new
road
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 has been built to make the way to the car park shorter and more convenient for visitors.
Conclusion
In the southeast of Porth Harbour, there has been considerable improvement. A new hotel has been constructed in the
area
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which
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, which
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 used to be a disused castle
and
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, and
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 the public beach has
transformed
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been transformed
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to
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into
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 a private beach for hotel visitors. A small new
road
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 is established for hotel guests to commute easily.

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task response
Give a clearer main picture in the overview. State the biggest changes: more tourist use, new hotel and private beach, and changes to boat areas and roads.
task response
Check every change on the maps before you write. Make sure the place, direction, and old and new use are correct. This is very important in a map report.
task response
Use more direct map language. For example, write “The fishing boat area was moved to the east” rather than “has been switched.”
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraph plan is clear: overview, harbour changes, roads, then the south-east. Keep this order, but group all water-side changes in one paragraph and all land-side changes in another.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links to show contrast and place, such as “while”, “whereas”, “to the north of”, and “in contrast”. Do not use too many different headings or phrases.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid unclear word groups. “As for commercial purposes” and “With respect to infrastructures” sound less natural. Use “New shops and cafes were also added” or “In terms of facilities” instead.
task response
You describe many key changes, including the new dock, toilets and showers, shops and cafes, hotel, and beach change.
task response
You make useful comparisons between the old harbour and the harbour now, and you also note that the main road and north-east beach did not change.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear opening and overview, followed by paragraphs about different parts of the harbour.
coherence and cohesion
Place words such as “northwest”, “northeast”, “southeast”, “between”, and “along the west” help the reader follow the map.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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