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You recently sent some documents by post, but they did not arrive at the destination. Write a letter to the post office manager. In your letter, •give details of the situation •describe the documents •say what action you want the post office to take

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documents
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post
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, but they did not arrive at the
destination
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.Write a
letter
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post
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task response
There is no letter to check. Write a full letter with what happened, what the papers were, and what you want the post office to do.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear start, then one part for each main point, and end with your name. Use simple link words such as “First”, “Also”, and “Finally”.
task response
The task points are clear: say what happened, describe the papers, and ask for help.
coherence and cohesion
The task has a clear order that can help you plan the letter.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • postal service
  • registered mail
  • tracking number
  • envelope
  • urgent
  • confidential
  • compensation
  • investigation
  • documentation
  • destination
  • customer service
  • resolution
  • discrepancy
  • correspondence
  • delivery
  • timeline
  • claim
  • follow-up
  • liability
  • accountability
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