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The table below shows key data on the demographics of four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table below shows key data on the demographics of four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table gives information about the demographics
,
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 of 4 different
countries
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Overall
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between
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 all
the
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three sectors, China had the largest population,
USA
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the USA
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 had the highest
GDP
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and
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UK
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the UK
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 achieved the highest average life expectancy. China is the only country that had more than terillion citezens but
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 low
GDP
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 compared with the other
countries
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.
UK
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The UK
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 has the lowest population and scored
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 highest average life
expectamcy
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expectancy
 among all the
countries
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,
for
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 the
GDP
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,
USA
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the USA
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 accounted for the highest
GDP
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 by $53,681 USD
acroos
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across
 all the
countries
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. The variation between all the
countries
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 in the average life expectancy is not
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significant,
while
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 the population there is a contrast difference between the
countries
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, China had 1,357,000,000,
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 UK had 64,937,000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, gdp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic metrics
  • age distribution
  • urbanization levels
  • population growth rates
  • life expectancy
  • birth rates
  • immigration policies
  • economic development
  • geographical size
  • historical factors
  • health care systems
  • infrastructure
  • quality of life
  • proportion
  • population size
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