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The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the rates of
energy
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 output by wind turbines between 1980
to
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and
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 2000 in the United
States
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,
India
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 and Germany.
Overall
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, there is an upward trend in electricity
generation
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 in the United
States
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 in the first few
years
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years,
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 as there is a
slightly
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slight
 decline in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 years.
However
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, there is a gradual growth in the amount of electricity
generation
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 in
India
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,
Denmark
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, Germany and
United
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the United
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states
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States
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. In detail, the highest level of
energy
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 produced by the United
States
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 in 1995
to
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was
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 about 1200
megawatts
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as
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, while
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 Germany stands at second point
around
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, around
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to
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apply
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400
megawatts
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. The lowest level of wind
energy
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generated
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is generated
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 by
India
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 and
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denmark
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Denmark
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. In 1990, The united
states
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 produed significant amount of
energy
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approximately
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, approximately
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 1660
megawatts
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by
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, by
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 contrast to other countries.
Moreover
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, there is
relatively
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a relatively
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 slight decline in electricity
generation
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 by wind
by The
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in the
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 United
States
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 in
1995
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1995,
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 exactly at 1600
megawatts
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.
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,
Denmark
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 experienced a remarkable rise in
energy
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generation
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about
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apply
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to 1200
megawatts
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 as compared to
previous
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the previous
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 year. 800
megawatts
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produced
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were produced
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 by
India
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, as
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as it
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which
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 was double than previous year.
Denmark
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 outraced all three countries in 2000
and
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, and
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 its power plants generate 1650
megawatts
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, states, india, generation, denmark, megawatts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wind energy generation
  • energy output
  • amount of electricity generated
  • overall upward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp rise
  • gradual growth
  • significant growth
  • a slight increase
  • a dramatic increase
  • remain relatively stable
  • show fluctuations
  • reach a peak
  • overtake another country
  • rank first
  • the highest figure
  • the lowest level
  • by contrast
  • whereas
  • over the two-decade period
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