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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to get drivers tested each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
In modern society, life has changed a great deal, especially in how
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Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, in
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Body paragraph 2
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Conclusion
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, the government recommends
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task response
Give a clear answer in the first part. Say if you agree, disagree, or agree only in part. Keep this same view in all parts of the essay.
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Write about the main point: yearly driving tests. Explain how they may make roads safer, for example by finding unsafe drivers or checking new road rules. Then explain why tests alone may not stop all road deaths.
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Do not use reports, numbers, or road names unless you can clearly explain where they come from and why they matter. The task gives no data, so phrases such as “given data” do not fit.
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Use real, clear examples. For example, an older driver may need a test after a long time, while young drivers may need more help with speed and phone use.
coherence and cohesion
Make one main idea for each body part. Start with a topic sentence, explain it, give an example, and link it back to your view.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating long phrases such as “in terms of” and “according to the given information.” Use simple links: First, Also, However, For example, Therefore.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to understand, such as “This will increase the right road.” Say exactly what you mean, for example: “This may help drivers follow road rules.”
coherence and cohesion
The last part should restate your answer, not add a new idea about “best life” or government tips. Keep it short and close to the question.
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You tried to show both sides of the issue, which is useful for this question.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear first part, two main body parts, and a final part.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words, such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “However.”
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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