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With a great variety of social networking websites, people often add complete strangers to their friend lists. Do you think that this tendency helps people to find new friends or is it just a mean to increase their self-esteem? Justify your opinion with relevant examples.

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Introduction
With the widespread popularity of social media platforms, it has become common practice for users to send or accept friend requests from
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people
 they
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 met in real life.
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 some argue that
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behaviour
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 to boost one's ego, I believe social networks genuinely
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 chances for meaningful new friendships, even though
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 desire for higher self-esteem can
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 play a part.
Body paragraph 1
On one hand,
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 is true that adding many
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 may sometimes be driven by a need for validation. Some
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individuals
 feel more valuable when they have a long friend list and receive plenty of likes on their number of online
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 with peers, and
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 competition can inflate their sense of self-importance rather than building real bonds. In
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 cases, adding strangers more about
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feeding
 self-esteem than developing friendship.
Body paragraph 2
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, social media removes many
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traditional
 barriers that stop people from meeting like-minded others. Many
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platforms
 organise public groups based on hobbies, career or life experience, where
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strangers
 can start conversations over shared interests. A good example is online communities
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for amateur
 photographers or language learners: members often add each other, exchange
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feedback
, and gradually build trust over months of regular interaction. Some of these online contacts later become real-world friends when they attend local meet-ups. Unlike superficial "follow counts", these connection build on
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common
 ground, not just
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to
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 popular.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 self-esteem can be a motive behind adding strangers online, these sites mainly give good opportunities to form genuine new friendships through shared interests.

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task response
You give a clear view: social media can help people make real friends, but some people want likes and a big friend list. To make your answer stronger, explain why real talks over time can turn an online link into a close friendship.
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Your example of photo and language groups fits the main idea well. Add one more short, real-life detail, such as two people meeting at a local photo walk after talking online for months.
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Keep your main view clear in every part. The first body part shows the other side, and the second body part gives your own view. This is a good plan.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an end. The order is easy to follow. Use the same style for linking words: “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” would make the contrast even clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow because words are missing. For example, write “adding strangers is more about feeding self-esteem” instead of “adding strangers more about feeding self-esteem.” Check that each sentence has a subject and a verb.
coherence and cohesion
Use short links between ideas. For example: “As a result,” “For this reason,” and “In contrast.” Do not add too many links, but use them when you move from one idea to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Check spelling and word form carefully, as these can slow the reader down. Examples include “people,” “behaviour,” “creates,” “strangers,” “platforms,” “common,” and “feel.”
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You answer both parts of the question and clearly state your own view in the first and last parts.
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The example of hobby groups shows how shared interests can lead to regular talks, trust, and later meetings.
coherence and cohesion
Each main part has one clear focus: first, the wish for praise; second, real friendship through shared interests.
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The ending returns to your main view and gives the essay a clear close.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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