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You are applying for a job and you need a letter of reference. Write a letter to a former boss. In your letter: *Describe the job you are applying for *Say what you want included in the reference letter *Request that you former boss send you the letter be the end of the week

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Dear Mr Hashemi, I am writing to ask you for a reference letter that I need to apply
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 a job
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 Pharmasave Company, which is located in Ontario. The job is
pharmacy
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a pharmacy
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 manager, which is
fit
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 with my experience and skills. I will be responsible for several duties, including financial management, inventory oversight, and patient consultation.
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 me several benefits,
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 as a competitive salary, 70$ per
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, remote working, and three days off per week, which enables me to spend enough time with my children. I would appreciate it if you could write a reference letter that includes the years I worked in your pharmacy, my potential skills, my tasks in your pharmacy, and my insurance number.
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, Pharmasave is interested in knowing my language skills, as the company offers services to a wide range of people with different languages, particularly French and English. I would
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 be grateful if you could send me the letter via email
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 the end of the week, September 25, as I have to forward it
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 company
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 September 27. Thank you for your consideration and time. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil

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Name the job clearly and keep the job details short. Do not add pay, days off, or home work, as these are not needed in a letter asking for a reference.
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Ask for the main facts your old boss can check, such as your work dates, duties, work skills, and language skills. Do not ask for your insurance number in a reference letter.
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Use a clear final request: ask your boss to email the letter by the end of the week. Check the date and say who should get the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Make the second part shorter so the main request is easy to see.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main point in each part: the job, what to write in the reference, and the date for sending it.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links such as "Also", "For this role", and "Please" to join ideas in a smooth way.
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You explain the job, say what you want in the reference, and give a clear time limit.
coherence and cohesion
The letter uses a polite greeting and closing, and the order of ideas is easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reference letter
  • job application
  • skills and experiences
  • highlight
  • qualities and achievements
  • emphasize
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • punctuality
  • technical skills
  • deadline
  • promptness
  • support
  • gratitude
  • contact information
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