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Band 5

A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter give contact details for when you are away give instructions about how to care for your pet describe other household duties You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

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Dear Mannu, I hope you are doing well!!Thanks a
millions
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, for accepting my request to take care of my pet and house
while
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i
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I
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 will be out of town for some
day
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days
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. First of all, I would like to give you some
contact
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 details in case you want to ask about anything
,my
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. My
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contact
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 no.2345672
and
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, and
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email
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my email
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 address is [email protected]. In case of
emergency
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 you can take help from my neighbour
Mr.
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, Mr.
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brown ,2503786 is his cell number
, i
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. I
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 have already informed him that you could be at my house when
i will be
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I am
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 on
holidays
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holiday
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.
Moreover
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, my
pet
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pet's
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 name is tiger
and
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, and
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 he likes to eat two times one is morning and other time in
evening
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the evening
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and
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, and
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 his
feed
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food
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 is in the kitchen cabinet under the sink. In case
, if
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you feel he is not well ,you can
also
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contact
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to
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the
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 vet
and
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, and
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 his mobile number is 3456788.
Apart from
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this
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,there are some plants
in
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inside and outside my house.It would be appreciated
,
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if you
will watering
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would water
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 them daily.
Furthermore
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, on
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the weekend
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weekend
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weekend,
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 just check
maibox
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my mailbox
 if there is any important
you
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information you
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 can inform me,and please open all the windows
in
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every two days.That's all for now
if
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. If
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 you need
anything
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anything,
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 just feel free to
contact
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 me. Thank you in advance. warm regards Mani

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task response
Give all key details in a clear way. Say when you will leave and come back, and explain what to do if Tiger is ill.
task response
Use clear full sentences for the house jobs. For example, say how often to water the plants and when to check the post.
coherence and cohesion
Put each main point in its own short paragraph: contact details, pet care, and house jobs.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words such as “First”, “Also”, “Finally”, and “In case of an emergency” to guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Check full stops, spaces, and capital letters. This will make the letter much easier to read.
task response
You answer all three main parts: contact details, pet care, and house duties.
task response
You give useful phone numbers, the pet food place, and clear jobs for your friend.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a friendly start and a polite ending.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “First of all”, “Moreover”, and “Furthermore” help show the order of your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • grateful
  • contact information
  • emergency
  • feeding schedule
  • exercise routine
  • medical needs
  • vet
  • preferences
  • habits
  • household duties
  • collecting mail
  • watering plants
  • taking out trash
  • comfortable
  • questions
  • warm message
  • enjoy
  • relax
  • have fun
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