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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features.

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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features.
The line
graph
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 illustrates the
trend
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 of the mean carbon dioxide
emissions
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 per person in four countries,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal
between
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, between
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 the years 1967 and 2007. Unit
measuerd
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measured
 in
tonnes
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.
Overall
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,
at the
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end
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 of the
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graph
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graph,
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 the United
Kingdom
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 had the highest
emissions
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 from all four countries, but Italy
was
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had
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 the lowest
country
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emissions
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 in the
graph
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. The first
period
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 is 1967 to 1987, the
trend
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 of Portugal was more than one tonne,
that
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which
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 made
this
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 country
had
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 the lowest
emissions
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 in
this
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period
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,
while
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 Italy had more than 4
tonnes
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 of
emission
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emissions
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,
Sweden
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 8.5
tonnes
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 and the United
Kingdom
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 11
tonnes
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 ( the highest
emissions
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 in
first
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the first
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period
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).
Throw
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During
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this
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period
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, the
trend
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 of Portugal and Italy was increasing
untill
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until
 the
end
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 of
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period
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the period
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, but
Sweden
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 and
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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was
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were
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 decreasing gradually. The second
period
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 is 1987 to 2007, at the beginning of the
period
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the
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, the
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trend
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 of Portugal and Italy kept increasing until the
end
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 of
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graph
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the graph
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, where the
emissions
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was
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were
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 ( 5 and 7
respictevelly
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respectively
).
Moreover
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, the
trend
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 of the United
Kingdom
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becomes
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became
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 9
tonnes
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approximatelly
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approximately
,
whereas
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Sweden
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in Sweden
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, the
trend
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 kept decreasing
which
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, and
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at the
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end
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 of
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the period
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period
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period,
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 the
emissions
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was
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were
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 5 ( close to the
emissionns
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emissions
 of Portugal).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, trend, emissions, kingdom, sweden, tonnes, end, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • average per capita
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • compare/contrast
  • period/stable
  • turning point
  • fluctuations
  • environmental policies
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • sustainable practices
  • emission reduction targets
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • renewable energy sources
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