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The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data demonstrates the results of a survey on how much people use libraries at a university.
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, full-time undergraduate students obtain the highest
percentage
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library
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 usage,
while
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survery
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survey
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satisfactory
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satisfaction
 of the
library
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 stated that the
helpfullness
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helpfulness
 of the staff
achieve
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achieves
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 the most satisfaction. The two highest
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percentage
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percentages
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 of
library
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 users are full-time undergraduate and full-time postgraduate
where
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 the
pecentages
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percentages
 are 44% and 25%. On the other
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hand, the
helpfullness
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helpfulness
 of the staff
achived
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achieved
 a remarkable
percentage
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 of satisfaction of 95%. The survey
also
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 stated that the availability of books has
least
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the least
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 amount of satisfaction by 40%.
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, the three lowest
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percentage
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percentages
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 of
library
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 users are academic staff, distance learning and part-time postgraduate
of
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students, of
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 which the
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percentage
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percentages
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 are 7%, 8% and 16%. If three of
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these
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combine
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 it would still be
lesser
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less
 compared to
full-time
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a full-time
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 undergraduate.
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, the availability was considered to have the
most
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highest
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percentage
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 of users
which
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, which
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 they did not satisfy with, displaying a
percentage
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 of 20%
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highest compared to both
availability
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the availability
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 of books and the reliability of wi-fi.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • library users
  • survey results
  • the chart shows
  • the table gives
  • the largest group
  • the smallest group
  • a high number
  • a low number
  • more than
  • less than
  • about the same
  • in general
  • overall
  • by contrast
  • while
  • compared with
  • positive view
  • negative view
  • service quality
  • study space
  • opening hours
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