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The graph below shows the population of a particular country by age group starting from 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.

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The graph below shows the population of a particular country by age group starting from 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.
The line chart shows the
population
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 of a particular country by age group starting from 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.
Overall
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,
illustrates
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apply
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the
population
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 by age group are decrease
including
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, including
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 0-14
,
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apply
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 and 15-64
,
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;
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however
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65+,had raising
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, 65+ has been increasing
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,
although
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 in 1990, 65+
,
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apply
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overtaken by
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overtook
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 0-14, and starting to increase, in 2040,
while
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 15-64
,
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fell, falling
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falling
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and
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 65+
got to
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followed
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 the trend.
On the other hand
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, from 1960
,
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apply
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until
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to
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 2040,
0
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the population aged 0
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-14
,
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apply
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 showed a
remained steadily decreased
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steady decrease
 from 30% to 10%
population
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 throughout the period,
fowllowed
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followed
 by 15-64,
also
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 the same
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; however
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however
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however,
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 in 1960
,
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apply
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 and 1970,
had
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there was
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 a slight increase, and from 1970
,
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apply
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 to 2040, had consistente decrease from 60%
,
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apply
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 to roughly 55%,
population
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.
Finally
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,
65+
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the 65+
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population
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in 1960
,
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apply
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 to 2040
,
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apply
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remained
Wrong verb form
is expected to
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 increase significantly from 15%
,
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apply
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 to 55%
population
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opproximately
Correct your spelling
approximately
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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