The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams
comapre
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compare
the current layout site as it was in 1950
adn
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and
1980 with the prepared plan for
transformed
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the transformed
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and expanded building and facilities in 2010.
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, the
diagrams
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site saw significant expansion
amd
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and
transformation over the
60 years
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60-year
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period to
accomodate
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accommodate
a larger and constructed car park
while
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removed
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houses and farmland.
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, rebuild sportfiled
while
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expanding
main
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school and build in sience block for education.
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with, 1950 houses, Farmland, School, and Playground were
in
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the map.
Furthurmore
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Furthermore
, houses
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have
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been removed and
constructed
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replaced
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by
car
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park and sience block. and sportfiled addtionally replaced Farmland in 1980.
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, in 2010 car park
has been
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was
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expanded
while
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sportfeild jointed at playground.
Wheras
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Whereas
,
Sience
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Science
block and
main
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the main
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School still remained
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such
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as mian road.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renovation
  • expansion
  • modernization
  • infrastructure
  • landscape
  • facade
  • demolition
  • construction
  • alteration
  • amenities
  • accessibility
  • sustainability
  • curriculum
  • enrollment
  • pedagogy
  • architecture
  • commute
  • heritage preservation
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