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the line graph show the number of closing and opening in specific nation from 2011 to 2018

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the line graph show the number of closing and opening in specific nation from 2011 to 2018
the
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The
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 graph provides information about the
number
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 of opened and closed
shops
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 between the
eras of
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years
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 2011
to
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and
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 2018
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it
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 is clear that there is a significant fall in the
number
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 of closed
shops
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, in addision the
amount
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number
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 of new
shops
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 was high until a
noticable
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noticeable
 decrease
accurd
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occurred
, there is an era where the
number
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 of opened and closed
shops
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 had a similar
number
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.
in details
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In detail
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from
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, from
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 2015 to
2017
Add a comma
2017,
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 there
was
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were
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 no new
opened
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shops opened
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shops
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,
in
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contrast
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contrast,
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 from 2016 to
2018
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2018,
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 the
amount
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number
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 of closed
shops
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 remained stable. pointing out
about
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that about
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 800
shops
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 were shut in
2015
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2015,
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while
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 8500 opened
shops
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 in 2011.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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